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Re: raetak's begun
« Reply #12 on Aug 21, 2007, 8:10pm »

ooc: Sorry. I couldn't help it. I made a few minor suggestions. When I write, I usually preview it before I post. Maybe that'll help you. You have to be careful and make sure the order you put words in make since. I'm not good at punctuation so I try to check my work.

Sateein was in a very good mood now that she had found a new dragon, a male one too ."I'd love to." she said. She followed Raetak in to the cavern. It was very dark to her , since she had lived in the plains and the sun was hot and bright.

Raetak had never felt this way."Love." he thought. "no, don't let your guard down, Raetak. She is still the enemy." His head was in a disagreement, so he moved on.

Sateein looked around until they finally stopped in the cavern. Raetak looked at her and said."the cavern we are in is a wonderous place but you must know where you're going, so don't go any place without me or you might get lost, OK?" She was stunned that he had seemed to cared about her "OK" she said.

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Re: raetak's begun
« Reply #13 on Aug 22, 2007, 10:35am »

Isn't it actually spelled "wondrous"? Mleh, where's my dictionary...

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« Reply #14 on Aug 22, 2007, 12:02pm »

thats ok i like that you all help me out and i did the spell so i dont now any way

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Re: raetak's begun
« Reply #15 on Aug 22, 2007, 6:31pm »

O_o
Dude. Complete. Sentences. Or at least complete thoughts marked off with periods!!! You have really good ideas, but it really helps if we can read them!

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Re: raetak's begun
« Reply #16 on Aug 23, 2007, 5:57pm »

it may be wondrous, I didn't look very long at it.

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« Reply #17 on Aug 27, 2007, 8:20am »

Sateein's last two days with Raetak were well nothing she just watched him go hunt come back go hunt come back all the time. But her plain days are over now some thing evil stirs in the mountains, Raetak would look at them more and more off his tower. He had bin very out and about on the plains. Some times she could tell that Raetak was up to some thing els.

Raetak looked off of the tower and nothing. He was looking for some thing but what "HM." He said to himself. "Whats in those mountains?" Sateein said to him. "I don't now." He said.

Little did he now he was being watch him from the mountains.

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Re: raetak's begun
« Reply #18 on Sept 3, 2007, 9:01am »

Raetak came back to his cavern, looking a little disturbed he thought that a dragon had nearly smacked in to him. Then fly away. "But thats impossible." He thinks. "HM... maybe i should go look were it went.HM." He said to himself. But he didn't think fast a enough Sateein was back now. Oh well. He thought.

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« Reply #19 on Sept 24, 2007, 6:55pm »

Raetak walked to his nest. He laid his head on the ground and thought about another dragon in HIS territory or maybe a dragon looking to find a home here on the plains. Raetak looked over at sateein who had gotten closer and closer every night in her nest, Raetak new that his heart loved her but his mind is hard to change as the mountain the he is under. He got up and went to the exit of the cavern and flied off.

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Re: raetak's begun
« Reply #20 on Sept 25, 2007, 6:11pm »

Raetak flied throe the night as his eyes looked, his nose sniffed the air and his ears listened for the dragon! his heart raced for no good reason and he race for no reason again he could smell his target, it was like a hunt only he needed his kill alive. He saw a cave and landed on the edge of it, looking in too see his target... occ: I hope the story is good.

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